Reviews for The Online Chronicles

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Tawny Owl 2008-05-17 ch 2,	abuseThat was so random and bizarre, but I loved it. Especially the completely mad bits like 'cats (that was a mistake, it got in my way)' Calling the sword 'You're Fucked' is brilliant, much better than the names you get in High Fantasy stuff anyway. Going to add to favourites and read the rest when I have time.
Nnaemeka 2008-05-07 ch 2,	abuseI'm hooked (no...really)! This is quite funny. The speech is strange, but the great thing is I still Understand it. The way you put in Fitty Cent is JOKES!! I'm adding this to my favourites!!
Sexy vampirechick 2008-05-06 ch 4,	abuseThis story gets better and better.Reminds me of the anime shows I used to watch.I suppose that's where you get your character's names.Something I didn't like too much,'cause it was too hard to catch. "It smelled like warm paper and coffee."
Sexy vampirechick 2008-05-05 ch 3,	abuseI liked this chapter the best from when I first read.You write better with third person point of view. Glad you changed it. Uh..maybe you should go to the first two chapters and edit them to third...but it's your choice. The ending was cool.It made me laugh.Very humourous of you! :)
Sexy vampirechick 2008-05-05 ch 2,	abuseThis chapter is more interesting.I've noticed you use the word "Bitch" a lot. I'm not much of a gamer's girl,so I didn't get some of the words used;like You're fucked was actually his weapon. I realized that after awhile. Chris sounds interestingly gay...hehe.I've also noticed that you use a lot of famous artists' names.And hey,did you call me a bitch in the end?!
Sexy vampirechick 2008-05-05 ch 1,	abuseDude,your IM Sland is strong,maybe consider changing some of them to normal words.I had a hard time trying to figure out what you said,even though I use IM slang almost every night. So yeah. Didn't see which part you were discrimating God,but it's good this way. The ending wasn't what I expected.At first I thought you were a ghost coming back to tell us how you died. You got some minor errors: "I die[died], then I end up back in my room on[no need for on] last Thursday." By the way,what's a save spot?
BirdDay 2008-04-26 ch 6,	abuseIt made me LOL outloud. I agree with Mr. Hamtaro. It needs more mudkips. I think the youth of today could still relate to such a topic. I think someone should get rickroll'd, too. Continue writing!
KuNnILiNg0 2008-04-17 ch 6,	abuseo man damn i was laughin my ass off was like: extremely white person voice: o he took it there snaps anyway fuckin great big fan lol
Jill 2008-04-16 ch 6, anon.	abuseWHOO! You updated. However, you are obviously a bit disturbed but nonetheless hilarious. :) Love the footnotes.
starleaf 2008-04-15 ch 3,	abuseRG Review! -Dialog: not too much to say here, but I found “CONSOLIDATE YOUR LOANS FOR FREE WITH AN EASY REGISTRATION PROCESS FFKD20303LOLZSIXETYSIXTTWO33443 234 342 +¼Ö?«??¦Äìn¦"tè¼??ÅÄÑÉâe«3Py4yJ” to be pretty funny. Hahaha. -Characters: The main character’s pretty funny too. I love how all he cares about is his ramen as he’s being attacked by the oh-so-annoying spammers. -Writing: I had a little bit of a problem with “He sliced a large rock into the shape of a pot…” You wouldn’t really slice a rock; you’d wear it away with tools or another rock. And that would take a long, long time. I didn’t really think the simplicity of the sentence did it justice. -Enjoyment: This isn’t exactly my kind of story, but the chapter did have me laughing at a few points. I can say, for sure, that the descriptive paragraphs are pretty well written for someone who hadn’t slept in several days.
helixdown 2008-03-09 ch 5,	abuseokay, this entire story was fucked up, but i gues it was funny
helixdown 2008-03-09 ch 4,	abuseUm, interesting?
helixdown 2008-03-09 ch 3,	abusei agree with nathanman, you suck! Lol, joking, this story is completely random i hope you realize
helixdown 2008-03-09 ch 2,	abuseLol, now that i can understand this this is freaking AWESOME! What the hell is an okami?
helixdown 2008-03-09 ch 1,	abuseI'm sorry, i couldn't understand this, at all

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