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a silenced revolution 2008-02-10 . chapter 1
Pensive, with pretty word choice. Quite nice, my only criticism is that it seemed like you used some of the same words too many times, such as "rough" and "strife". That could just be me though.

"When I met you, my heart skipped a beat.
You’re my only love, my only cheat"
-- the rhyme here seemed a little forced.

Overall, well done.
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