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| Momiji K. Sohma 2008-05-15 ch 1,  | abuseWhat a jerk! ;-; -Huggles you- I hate people that do that kind of thing. |
| BrokenHeart4Eva 2008-03-13 ch 1, | abuseits ok to put up walls for awhile... we all need to do it from time to time just so long as you dont let a chance at happiness pass you by because of them very well written |
| purple x pen 2008-01-23 ch 1, | abuseonce again, i can relate, not the kissing part, just that i let sum1 in, well i openned up and trusted, just to get hurt in the end, its not kwel, but this piece is =) |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseGreat job on description. I hope things get better for you. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Lurid Black 2008-01-11 ch 1, | abuseIts really sweet, well written, pulsing with love and sorrow, great poem, keep writing! ~Lurid~ |
| sweets555 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuse*hugs*. I've been here before, many times. I hope that you know that one day you'll have to get close to someone. But it doesn't have to be soon. Great job describing your feelings, this was beautifully written. I'm adding to my favs for sure! |
| SEMMU 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseSorry to hear it. Good poem. You may wish to revise and omit a few things. For instance, read your poem without "very well", "when I see him", "He acts", and "The thing is". It'll flow much better. A good rule is to get rid of all nonessential material. Be concise. Write on! Write on! |
| simpleplan13 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abusesad ending... but very true how one person can affect your life so much... great piece |