i luved it, it was truely wonderful!

I love dis poem... dis is very deep...i give you five finger snaps to it. WOW!!...dis really touch me...it makes me want to call my ex...:)...and read this poem to him...lol..but wat a great job...keep writen the love poems...



and anotha thing
who is u talkin about??
lmao

I like the repetition of You are the one.

It enforces the heart pang. My heart clenched everytime I read that phrase.

It is so touching.

I would have never imagined any of my loved friends/family wants to commit suicide. They are kinda...too strong for that =_=... I wont think I will too since I am too happy go lucky in life. lol.

Touching poem. Nice.

Wow this is great! I've never seen anything like this. It's so... moving! Well this reminded me of something...
Last year, over the summer, my best friend since birth committed suicide. I was devastated. I started cutting, to ease the pain because suicide never worked. I still think about her...every second of every day. All the time, no matter what.
Anyways, good job. :]

"You're the one that said you wouldn't leave." The sorrow in this line is lovely. There's such a sense of betrayal here. Cool. :)

This is beautiful! I loved it!

Loved it. You definatly remind me of myself. Your writing style is similar and so are the subjects. I write lyrics mostly about sad or painful love/life situations.
Hope to see more of your stuff! ^_^

I've lost loved ones to, it's sad, but you know they don't want you to keep crying and to move on in your life, but hold them in your heart and to remember them not by seeignthem lying in that acrussed bed with tears in your eyes, but by the memories and good things they did with smiles in their faces and laughs in their throats. :)

I liked this poem mostly for its abstract format. The three sets of rhyming lines mixed with the single title line works. It feels original and consistent all at once.

The subject matter felt a little dark, albeit unoriginal, but your experimentation with the format must be commended. It really offers something new.

Great job.

this would a nice song with a slow and sweet melody, the part of dying is touching.

oh, I like it! nice job rhyming--I'm terrible at that. nice imagery; use more. good work, keep going.

My closes friend.. closest

Very sad and well written... I really like the repetition.. great piece

beautiful

im so happy your back

I hope you rewrite Slave because that story was the best out of all stories i read. Ever since i first read it on The-n it has been in my head

Heartbreakingly sad.
I'm pretty sure this is true, and I know it may not mean anything to you, but I am truly sorry for your loss.

wow. this makes me want to cry. good repitition.
love it.