 Camilleta 2008-01-29 . chapter 1Wow. I want to give you constructive criticism and encouragement like you gave me buut all I can really say is wow. =P Ooh, I should do this with my haiku. Thanks for the idea. |
 Chidori Nadare 2008-01-19 . chapter 1The haikus are good on its own and together. It flowed smoothly. I like the dark and grungy undertones of it. I love this part:
'Animosity
And malice drove her insane
Manipulation'
Gorgeous word choice here. Well written haikus.
-C.N |
 I.O.K.O 2008-01-17 . chapter 1No need for dark undertones. No need for concreteness. A truly straightforward, abstract piece. You should make this into a novel of some sort. |
 BlackWolfCub 2008-01-17 . chapter 1i love this |
 Zach P. 2008-01-15 . chapter 1 Great poem
Really liked the way it flowed.
Favorite lines were definately:
A spark in dead eyes
…
Her thoughts shift crimson
Like the wake of a demon
Duress of her mind |
 Dextera 2008-01-14 . chapter 1You have an intriguing style in your haikus: descriptive, yet blunt. It leaves a very powerful connection. Keep up the good work and thanks for the review. ;) |
 Counting Petals 2008-01-14 . chapter 1You did a beautiful job in your word choice. The whole series was very powerful. Keep it up! |
 lookin4nemo 2008-01-14 . chapter 1Very very well written! It is poetic and just amazing! ALL the lines are my favorite! IT is so good..indescribable (i sux at spelling but oh well) Keep it up as i no u will!
~lookin4nemo~ |
 alwaysthereforyou 2008-01-13 . chapter 1These are really well written my favorite one is:
A thirst for terror
Would dance in scorn and disdain
A spark in dead eyes
My only suggestion would be to center your writing because then this poem with actually look like and eye, and I think that would be awesome. Keep up the good work, I really like it a lot. |
 thursdays and rain 2008-01-13 . chapter 1brilliant.. off to read more ;) |
 siphoned afterglow 2008-01-13 . chapter 1Very good choice of words. I like this piece. It was to me about a close friend slipping to another skin, like becoming a stranger. GReat work!
and thanks for the review on my work! |
 Moondog Dozier 2008-01-12 . chapter 1Marvelous sound for a haiku series. I like the way this both has distinct individual haiku's that combine for a greater meaning when read all the way through. Well written. Very audible. |
 EddisThief 2008-01-12 . chapter 1To me, these poems are years of pining over a long lost friend that just keeps slipping under...Well done |
 simpleplan13 2008-01-12 . chapter 1powerful imagery and beautiful piece... I love the line "her thoughts shift crimson" |
 .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-01-11 . chapter 1Another interesting one, unlike any other I have seen. I liked how you formatted it as a string and the spacing made it seem brutal and choppy (definitely a good thing). I think there could have been one more at the end. Keep writing; these are awesome.
-stix- |