 firefairy27 2008-01-11 . chapter 1Perhaps it's just me, but it all seems rather cliche...
It doesn't have enough of an attraction to me for me to continue reading--but again, that might just be me ^^;; I'm a very picky reader.
You might, however, try experiemnting with word choice and upper level deiction--they make stories more intriguing and entertaining.
And I hope I haven't discouraged you from anything--I'm just picky is all, I do urge you to keep it up ^^
-Fairy |