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| hija de jesucristo 2008-07-15 ch 4,  | abusethis is way good i would love to know what happens next it's so lovely and yet so sad i like your writing lots |
| hija de jesucristo 2008-07-05 ch 1, | abuseyep this is good normally i read the whole thing and review later but i'm running out of time i promise to come back later cause it's good |
| AbbeyEileen 2008-06-29 ch 1, | abuseIt's an interesting start to what surely will be an interesting story... there are a good deal of typos and missing words, like when they are still at school and Aubrey says, "All you ever do is protect from Riley you need a break." First, you need the 'me' after protect, and some punctuation after 'Riley' would probably help. Otherwise, it makes sense, but isn't exactly correct... |
| My.Psuedonym.Was.Taken 2008-06-29 ch 4, | abuseHey, just wanted to review your story since i liked it so much! this is actually the first story i've read on fiction press, and i like it! What's a bit freaky is the likeness of some of the characters to myself or some friends of mine...except my life isn't as exciting as having boys fight over me, or having anyone who likes me haha. Anyways, just watch your language a bit (although that's probably my own personal preferance) and just watch a few teeny spelling errors and incorrect tense in grammar, other then that, Keep writing! My.Psuedonym.Was.Taken aka Maddy ☻ ☺ ♥ |
| iPod 2008-06-20 ch 3, | abuseGarsh, I was kinda hoping that she would end up with alex so lets get Riley out of the picture *kills Alex* :D So now its OBVIOUS their gonna get togethere. I mean, you doesn't want a hot cali guy as their bf? |
| iPod 2008-06-20 ch 1, | abuseGREAT! |
| BookOfSpells 2008-05-30 ch 4, | abuseAWESOME story update soon I can't wait to read more! |
| DeviantlyMental 2008-04-17 ch 3, | abusePretty cool Lindsey...keep up the good work! I want to read more XD |
| SpiritWolf19 2008-04-17 ch 3, | abuseok wow...your story left me speechless. your style is very laid back and i love it. the plot line really drew me in. Update soon! |
| MuseofMagic 2008-04-17 ch 3, | abuseWait for it... wait for it... aw! Haha. That was a cute chapter. I do feel bad for Alex, but I am a fan of Aubrey/Riley I must admit. I'm always a fan of the "bad" boy. Can't wait for more! |
| SO-iiN-LOVE 2008-04-17 ch 3, | abuseaw so cute i like it good story |
| Deenu12 2008-04-15 ch 2, | abuseaw great story. i hope you update soon. |
| MuseofMagic 2008-04-15 ch 2, | abuseAmusing. I got several good chuckles. Especially where she answers his "what's up your **?" question with "you are" because that's exactly how my friends and I answer it. The last line of chapter two being in third person seems out of place, but it's one line so *shrugs* Keep up the good work. |
| DeviantlyMental 2008-01-18 ch 1, | abuseWe, nice story ^^ like all the other reviewers, nothin' good then a good cliche' story to set the mood right! XD keep it up Lindsey |
| follow the night light 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseit's promising (and ja, nothing like a good ol' cliche)but i don't know why but the story is kinda stiff in flowing, perhapes its because the main character needs to be more vivid? to be developed more steadily? |