nice, witty, and very, very creepy.

I liked this and I think you are a very very talented poet.

Narq.

Hm~ This poem is like none other I've seen. Great originality! I liked the almost joyful beat in it but with a warningful end.

Very nice,
Narq.

I'm not really into politics or anything, and I honestly don't know much about war, especially not the war today. But I do know enough to like this poem and recognize its value.


"The filthy politicians who declared war and sit quietly behind desks and four walls
Should all line up, and a thousand guns would blow them apart like dolls"

I really liked those lines, although I think the terrorists should be the first to line up.

This is a chilling poem with such a catchy title! It's so...chilling. It's like a nighttime poem. The rhyming is wonderful, and I feel as if the poem turns into a magic spell with it.

I think that the very last line may have a typo, "But the sanguine cloak in nowhere in sight." Did you mean "IS nowhere in sight?"

What exactly is the sanguine cloak? Your mysterious poem successfully made me wonder even more about what it really is? Is it the dawn?

Great job!

I really like this one, but my only problem is that the insane man sings of war and sin. I think you could have picked something better than insane for that. Writing sonnets is really hard for me, so I'm impressed you wrote one so well.

-LoL

ha ha, I like it. Your rhyming pattern, if you have one, is definitely not consistent, but that is okay. Great poem.

-LoL

The more I read this sonnet, the more I like it. The second and third quatrains in particular are my favorite due to their imagery.

The only thing that jumps out at me is the last line of the third quatrain. The emphasis does not correspond with the second line, the second line being s/us/s/us/s/us/s/us/s/us and the fourth line being us/s/us/s/us/s/us/s/s/us. I would suggest editing that last line to "Dash their hope 'til they, like cats, do cower.’" Also, this way, the commas won't throw a reader off the rhythm.

Technically the second line of the third quatrain is in trochaic pentameter while sonnets are supposed to be entirely in iambic, but technicalities. :P I doubt anyone else will notice.

Excelent imagery,and you have an intresting interpritation of the insane man.

Pretty good.

Wow, very nice. One of the best I've seen on FictionPress, I'd say.

I think this is an awesome piece of writing!

Very, very nicely done! =)

I'm very happy to see that someone actually chose to write a sonnet. There are too few people on here who use this style, I think.

I think this is a very clever, amazingly-written poem, and I love the last two lines! What a great finish.

A definite favorite!