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aside from the rhyming (again!)I liked the poem, but not as much as the others. i felt like the meaning behind it was less... meaningful, and more of just something to write a poem about.

otherwise, i thought it was great. keep writing and post more soon!

were you feeling all right when you wrote this? i like it, but it's a little... strange. Again, the rhyming kinda bugs me, but not as much as with the first poem.

I think this is my favorite of your poems so far. again, i don't like rhyming, but it worked a lot better with this one then with the first.
the one part that didn't work with me was the word 'crackly.' i felt like it didn't fit the poem very well. i would recommend wither replacing it with a different word, o just cutting it out altogether, though that would disrupt the length of the line.

thats kinda depressing, don't you think? i really enjoyed it. The repeating of the first stanza at the end added to that. the one thing I would recommend is to cut as many theres, ands, and iss as possible to help with the poem's flow.

great poem, but i felt like the rhyming threw it a little off balance. it is a poem about dark and evil nightmarish things, but rhymes give a poem a stable and comforting feel, which isn't idea for this topic. Also, rhymes can feel forced if the authors isn't strangely brilliant with words. i like it a lot though! :)
rhymes just happen to be one of my pet peeves

I am glad to see that other of my generation see what the future will be like if Man keeps up what we are doing. Your poem, Dark Windows, is astonishing. Your youth does not surprise me, however. Often, much of the work I read and review by my friends if much better than things I get from my teachers and their friends/collegues. Just so you know, your friend, BlueDenim, reccommened you to me after I reviewed her stuff earlier. I am glad that boredom with my highschool life sat me down in front of the computer and typed in the URL for fictionpress this morning otherwise I would not know that there are others like me and a few of my friends that See. Keep up your work.

I am not sure if you know this, but the strongest thing about Dark Windows is the fact that you repeated the first stanza in its entirety and did not change a thing about it. You introduce something, explain it, then show the thing again, and it is looked at as a new and different thing. Great job. Also, keep up the imagery you showed in Fire and you will definitely go far. About The Nightmare, I am but five yaers your senior, but I can tell you something: take the good with the bad and it keeps your head from getting too big. If you want to forget something, forget it. I know it sounds easier than it is, but, really, there is no other way to explain it. You have years to come, yet, and many things change in those years. So, don't worry, and don't hold grudges because all they do is remind the other person. Smile!

Oh, and don't bother asking: of course I intend to read your stories as well.

Remember that is the young like us that will change the world of the old before us for the young after us. And do not be headstrong when the young after us change our world, for they really will be smarter than us... just don't admit it to them, is all.

Keep your mind sharp.

~Leafeus Agamemnon

nice
this is about fire
hope ur not an arsonist
JKJK
this is awesome

i think this is depressing
but i am unsure

i like this one
its fun to say