Reviews for Everyone's a Martyr

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xAirAngelx 2008-05-11 ch 23,	abuseSeriously, the suspense is killing me. I'm itching to know what happens next. Way to keep us on our toes. :D
xAirAngelx 2008-05-04 ch 21,	abuseclaps like crazy I really enjoyed this chapter, it's so action-packed. Also, it's completely suspenseful, keeps you guessing what's going to happen next and brilliantly descriptive. I admire you. :) I can't wait until your next chapter, you have no idea how much I look forward to it.
LoKi 7000 2008-05-01 ch 1,	abuseI can tell how your writing style is very influenced by bands such as Norma Jean and the Chariot. Seriously, I can just picture these chapter titles as names of a CD. lol
xAirAngelx 2008-04-23 ch 20,	abuseDamn, that was excellent. They were like a wild firing machine gun. They were kicking arse and not bothering taking names. It was quite saddening about Pipes and General, they were brilliant but it's even more to have Dallas and Mr.Reese completely forget in a matter of minutes. I never thought that Eric could be so... manic. But it's all for a good cause right. I really enjoy reading this, it's different, it's written amazingly, it's not the same tell tale story, It's epic. I really haven't found a word that surpasses epic yet but when I do, you'll be hearing it from me, on this story. Looking forward to your next chapter, I'm ecstatic.
Jayster007 2008-04-20 ch 1,	abuseWow! I couldn't stop reading! Who do you remind me of... Ahh, that's it. You remind me of Anthony Horowitz. You have a lot of talent when it comes to suspense, and throwing in the definition of "panic" in there was godly. I look forward to reading more.
xAirAngelx 2008-04-19 ch 19,	abuseThere you go. :) Wow, so the bombing is happening, huh? Damn, this is getting pretty fast. It's so suspensful and I'm really eager to find out what's going to happen in the next chapter. This is so brillaint and clever, I am really enjoying reading it. It's pretty epic, I look forward to your next. I can't wait. ;)
xAirAngelx 2008-04-19 ch 18,	abuseUm, Jake, I think you might have posted up the previous chapter 17 as the number 18. Mistake?
KoFBoT 2008-04-02 ch 17,	abuseI really like this one! The background you concocted throughout the story makes it very interesting. I'll keep an eye on this one, it's entertaining. >:3
therealme1123 2008-03-25 ch 17,	abuseDefinitely good. It's making me think. Was the poem/ song lyrics/ thingy supposed to reflect Kyle's thoughts? MR
therealme1123 2008-03-22 ch 16,	abuseThat, finally was something unexpected. It seems as if someone is immediately taking charge of the situation, and that's not something you could even hope for. But for the people inside, that's good. I like it. I also like that Alisa got a bullet to the brain, but I never liked her anyway. another thing I didn't like was the phrasing of the dialogue in the beginning of the chapter. It seemed more like a computer talking rather than living human beings and it added no voice to the piece. I would advise that you remedy that. Otherwise it was good, a definite improvement from last chapter. MR
xAirAngelx 2008-03-21 ch 15,	abuseOh my god. It's over? Kyle's dead... Damn, Jason too. I wonder what's going to happen now... Please, update again when you can, you have left me questioning what the hell is going to happen because Kyle is gone. ...Wait, isn't there a second command..
therealme1123 2008-03-20 ch 15,	abuseThat was a bit short comparative to your other chapters, so I'm just a little surprised by that. the length of the chapter, however, is the only thing surprising. Some more details towards the end, maybe something describing fear, anxiousness, or tension, would have made the cliffhanger more effective, and it would have been even better had there been more dialogue between Jason and Kyle over the ethics and necessity of Katie's death. Also, the " Gunshot gunshot gunshot" part would have been better had you spaced them unevenly, causing some more suspense within the reader's subconscious thinking/ reading. I hope the next chapter's better. MR
TimeOfYourLife 2008-03-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseI've only read the first chapter, but it's really well written and cool. I think it's my type of thing. Love it.Oh, maybe you could delete some of the long spaces between sentences, because it was obnoxious to have to scroll down so much.
xAirAngelx 2008-03-14 ch 14,	abuseAW! It had to end there. XD I cannot wait until you update next. My God, this story is golden.
therealme1123 2008-03-04 ch 14,	abusesorry that I can't leave something more in depth, but I'm in a time crunch... anyway, I like it. do continue. MR

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