You are a very good writer. I really like this story and I eagerly the await the next chapter. Please update soon! (:

INTENSE.
you must update soon because i want to know what happens.
btw, Demi and Cain are two smexiful names :)

kep writing.
and good luck :D

Wow! Really good story! It rocks!! :) Update soon, please!

OMG Leo Demi’s dad! Yup.?
I like the story on Demi; it’s just there are loose strands, besides the improbability of making a superhero out of experiments, why would her dad want to do that, eh why not? Poor Toby, even if he’s not real. I can’t wait to see the action in the next chapter. This chapters good... it’s just I have to admit I’m a wee bit (I’m so Irish) disappointed that Cain is a turning out to be great as the villain. I feel like a climax is approaching. Besides the big brawl, I’m going to be on the edge of my seat crossing my fingers that you have a super awesome twist. Oh, but no pressure.
Oh yeah, and I totally understand everything now. She can run super fast, not fly. Uh... maybe I should re-read chap.4

Aw. I think I'm in love with this story. And I love the names! Nellie, Dana and Cain. So original, the tiny dose of humour was good too. It's so realistic and I like the direction this is going, how she's some sort of experiment.
When I saw the twilight jab a.n. I thought "Oh god, it's going to just be hate" but it fit excellently. Good job :P I know I probably could never write like that, and that's with a spellchecker.

This chapter was great for various reasons. I finally got through the whole thing listening to 'He kisses the streets I walk'. But anyways. A fantastic job at description, of course I can't really believe anyone would be so generous to a random girl from an asylum but I guess I also can't really believe said girl flying. Oh well, this story has so much potential even though it doesn't have that many reviews.

This story is great... update soon. =p

Dear Author,
I`ve just finished reading all of the
currently published 6 Chapters. And let
me say that it was a honor to read,
that was a good story so far and I hope
you continue writing it! I like how you
begun in the exposition to haveing Demi
like the asylum, and still wanting to go
back there -- it adds a different
perspective that you wouldn`t usually
consider in normal life. Most of the time
people don`t take the time to think about
the people in the asylums, let alone
believe they like it.

I do have one question:
When you posted --

"Little mouse, you've never even told me your name." I knew he was still in the upper part of the library, and I might be able to make it to the door if he didn't see her. "If I catch her and we have to bust out of here together, I should at least know her name."

It was confusing because you were writing
in first person one second and in second
the next. When you said, "I might be able
to make it to the door if he didn't see her."
I think you ment, "I might be able
to make it to the soor if he doesn`t see me."
Didn't I THINK is improper grammar - Don`t
quote me on that one.

I really enjoyed your story, thanks for
uploading!

Sincerely,
~Devouring Daisies

This is absolutely my favorite story on here! Fo Sho. It's so extremely original! I can't wait to read the next chapter. There are a few spelling errors, but hey, it happens. Sometimes I get into the mode too and just type. lol Keep it up ;)

Yay German. This story just keeps getting better and better. Kepp up the good work!

Cool story Nellie should get a hair cut to be in even harder to find! although I think it would be cool if you talked or explained about the scientist that sent Cain to get Nellie or Demi.

INTENSNNSSE!! I want Cain to be in it more! Hes intersting. For some reason in my weird messed up mind I keep imagining Cain and Demi falling in love. Hee, im messed up. But that would be funny and great. lol

OH MY GOD OHMY GOD! THIS FRICKEN AMAZING.

W-O-W. This is amazing. Like seriously, it's awesome!

Look at the BrightSide
Its a Happy Place...

Not many stories scare but...wow... this one made me wanna hide in a closet. Insane people who are voilent scare me alot and your story got straight into it. I cant wait for chapter 2!