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| electric feel 2008-03-30 ch 1,  | abuseas you sped away from me good ending it rips away the gentle scene you began with and makes the piece more memorable |
| a silenced revolution 2008-02-07 ch 1, | abuseJust beautiful, and I'm not sure what else to say. |
| Edgar Wellington 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseI really like the opening of this poem. I like the idea that this whole poem is like your "photograph" of the moment, yet it is about you being photographed. This is a wonderful juxtaposition of viewpoints, especially since it includes juxtaposed points in time too. |
| multiples of six 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abuseThis is so pretty.. I don't have another word for it. Even the ending is more pretty than it is sad. I hope you see that as a compliment, haha =) |
| smile for the sunshine 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abusethat was beautifully written. i loved it. good work. |
| Leaves of Labefaction 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abuseThe third verse is the best in my opinion. The whole thing is very beautiful, a great combination of happiness and melancholy. |
| Aomera 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseagain, stunning imagery - love the sails idea. photography is fascinating...always provokes poets |
| creepy kiss on tuesday 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuse=[ did he die? i don't quite understand the ending. it makes me sad, though. |
| Aquafied 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abusethis makes me think of catalina even though i've never been nice beach days are so very rare. |
| siphoned afterglow 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseWow. Yeah, I like it. I like the intense imagery and how each line gave a clear picture. I loved the last paragraph the most, it had beauty and a sense of lingering sadness trailing in its wake. wonderful piece. [and thanks for the amazing feedback you leave me] |