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| Sorrow's Laughter 2008-02-18 ch 1,  | abuseThis is great. I love how you made it really sound like Alice in Wonderland and I love the stanza about the mad hatter. |
| she smolders 2008-01-24 ch 1, | abuseThere's so many metaphors that could be pulled out of the story of Alice in Wonderland, it's always left me intrigued. This is amazing in the way that I almost can't understand the real message because it's deeper and connects with so many different emotions. Take care. |
| MirandaToock 2008-01-16 ch 1, | abuseStuck in Wonderland? Interesting, very interesting. From where do you get your ideas? |
| Ashelin 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseAnd what a place to be stuck. This is actually really creepy because I've been thinking about Alice in Wonderland a lot lately and this has basically just made my head spin with "what a coincidence" that may not be coincidence at all, like the government is sending us messages through every day things and we don't even know but what's the relevance of a little girl who falls into a funny place dreaming things not so pretty and not so nice and finding that the way out is that there is no way out. Oh dear I'm going nowhere. Wonderful poem anyway. |
| Daiysis 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseI love the structure and how you based it off Alice in Wonderland. I grew up with that story, thinking it was about a little girl lost from her family, but as I got older I realized a deeper truth of its inner meanings and why everything was so... (for lack of a better word) random. You turned girl's dreamland where anything can literally happen and put it into retrospect with our reality. Amazing... |
| IdeasInTheAir 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseI love it. I love all of the references to Alice and Wonderland, where nothing makes sense. I guess that actually, this is Wonderland, because nothing HERE makes sense. Like a teacher teaches, but a hammer doesn't ham. One goose, two geese, one moose, two meese? What the heck? This was really well done, as usual, and I liked the font effects. Smiles for you!!=) Danielle=) |
| perpetual questions 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseSo happy you updated! I love the use of bold/italics/underline; it really adds to the the poem, and the dark view of Wonderland is intriguing. It does seem like we're all stuck in a place where nothing makes sense. Maybe we are, or aren't; I can't tell anymore. Favourite part: "The mad hatter told me that life was all about the way you acted not the way you looked, but we always knew there was something wrong with him." |