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theflyingcrabsareeatingmyha... 2008-03-23 ch 1,	abuseThis is cute. I especially enjoy the humor in this piece: the sarcastic, lighthearted way you phrase this really makes me feel as though it was written by a close friend, or something. It's a very personal, laid back speech. My biggest issue would be the fact that you never really seem to discuss the irony that was the title of the poem. You say that there was irony involved at the beginning, but you don't describe what it is. The only aspect that could be considered ironic at all would be the last line; and since the universe is being personified, this isn't true irony because it isn't a real event. Even within the storyline, the universe speaking is an imagined occurrence. I can't think of the words to define irony right now; if you want some tips, I recommend listening to "Ironic" by Alanis Morissette. I have to go beg Frac's forgiveness now for putting this off for so long, but if I think of what I'm trying to say, I'll PM you or review the next chapter of this.
kloun doll 2008-03-17 ch 1,	abusethe verse 6 life enjoys throwing at me... it's true, life is a game by the way.
damaged isolation 2008-03-13 ch 1,	abuseWell G'day, I very much like this style of poem. It is probably the best poem I have read on FP other than my best friend's (and excluding mine of course since I can't judge that). You write with simple style which never gets in the way of itself. I did particularly like the use of italics for the voice of the other...the universe...it gave a sense of coming from two directions, as if this is an objective point of view, rather than some subjective thought process. I did not like the line 'without also having to' and I guess you probably didn't entirely agree with it either when you wrote it. I'm not sure what I'd replace it with, but it just sounds very lumpy...you know what I mean? 'having to' is not a nice way of saying anything. In any case, it is a good poem. PS This is one of your prize reviews. savour it. ha.
Zoromaru 2008-03-11 ch 1,	abusepretty nice, though its odd to start with four lines then go to three for the rest of the poem.
xxopticaldelusions 2008-03-06 ch 1,	abuseHaha, I like this. Particularly the last line.
Ramenluver 2008-02-29 ch 1,	abuselol, I really liked this. The end was a bit amusing. -Ramen
Luny Loona 2008-02-04 ch 1,	abuseConsidering you decided not to punctuate your piece, probably leaving off the comma at the end of 'saying' and also the capitals will probably make the poem flow better. The italicised lines really stand out - you should have probably ended with one too, then. I like the last paragraph, about falling and marvelling at twists. Happy writing!
perpetual questions 2008-02-03 ch 1,	abuseSo harsh and true. Life is like that. "forces me to laugh through my tears" -that line felt a little too long and a bit awkward... maybe put "forces me" in the line above? Just a suggestion, good job.
Nemonus 2008-02-03 ch 1,	abuseGood work. This poem has the clarity that many who are writing abuot rather vague things (emotions, events the reader doesn't have the whole picture of) don't acheive. I especially like "Let me finish mourning/without also having to/marvel", and "I bow down to you"--nice, concrete illustration of an emotion.
Her Wishing Well 2008-01-28 ch 1,	abuseComical. The sattire in this is used brilliantly. I loved it. Great work.
Militant Poet 2008-01-28 ch 1,	abuseah, a very good poem, i enjoy your fluid form and modern feel.
Ghost Planet 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuseI like this poem. It may be that I've just finished reading two Shakespeare plays, but it seems to have a kind of Shakespeare style to it. Not in it's language or anything, but just in like, the topic? I don't know, it's hard to explain. But I love it anyway. xoxo Eilish.
Frosted Midnight 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuselife does enjoy kicking you while your down..this is an interesting peice, Im not very adept at freeverse myself, so my reviews of said subjects can be somewhat iffy..but i liked it.
ode to melancholy 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuseI really, really like this. Especially the first stanza. Great job!! =)
EmotionalTrauma 2008-01-26 ch 1,	abuseSo I can laugh as I trip, and fall flat on my face... Love it.

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