Reviews for Mister Clockwork - FictionPress.com

daughterofmusic 2008-03-17 ch 1,	abuseHahaha! That's too creepy.. Nice ending, though. shivers I can just imagine that stare, though... that's so scary... ~Music
Akhdar 2008-03-01 ch 1,	abuseThis is a fun story, a bit like the spooky stories that you read around fourth grade itself. Nothing is ever proven, but I loved that last line. "Taken in for maintenance". Now, as it stands, I think it's very well done. The only thing that caught my attention is that we don't know who's narrating. It's not Jenny or Heather, but it's obviously a student or someone sympathetic with children not being believed by their parents. It may not be important to know who's talking, but it distracted me a bit to not have that in place. A name isn't important, just knowledge of whether or not the narrator was a student of Mr. Clockwork.
Microsuede Mouse 2008-01-17 ch 1,	abuseGod, Su-chan, don't you eer tell that at one of our sleepovers, I'll kill you. ("It's not even scary!" you say. Think about who this is, though.) It was amazing. But creepy. Just two things: "...the principle sent..." should be 'principal' "...this word as never uttered..." should be 'was' Other than that, it's totally awesome.