Reviews for If the Sky Were to Fall

Reviews For: If the Sky Were to Fall

Toreanie 2008-06-11 ch 1,	abuseI have no clue why, but I was reading to myself out loud and it made me think of Dr.Suess (please take no offense to that). I like how it sort of runs into everything because of the lack of puncuation. It gives it that...hectic?...kind of feeling. Anyways, I liked it! Good job!
Arn 2008-02-08 ch 1,	abuseWow. Very interesting and mind boggling. I like.
Liebe Dance 2008-01-30 ch 1,	abuseWhoa, I like this. The lack of puntuation really gives it a running feel, as though you can't stop reading and the thoughts/statements tumble over eachother kinda like falling. I like the enternal rhymes. They're well done. But there are a couple lines that I don't quite understand. I think that I'd add a couple of punctuation marks to clarify the change of topics. One such place would be around the line "our fears come alive in us nihtmares thrive / the pieces of sky..." That part is a little unclear as to what you're trying to say. Also the line "when the sun thought of theft we'd be all that was left" doesn't really make sense to me. Other than that though, I really liked this poem.
Eve's Deception 2008-01-23 ch 1,	abuseThis is amazing. I love it. The only slightest problem I have with it is the formating. I know it was written that way on purpose (because you can tell by the flow it takes on) but somewhere along it loses you as your eyes travel too fast though the lines, trying to catch all the words and skipping to the next because they don't necessairly have that pause to look foward to in a period. Am I making sense? Well in conclusion, have you ever thought about trying it into a more poem like format? That is, if it wouldn't change the intricate balance of it. Overall, simply wonderful
Microsuede Mouse 2008-01-17 ch 1,	abuseIt's so awesome, Su-chan...

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