Reviews for All's Fair in Love and War

Reviews For: All's Fair in Love and War

aneman333 2008-10-05 ch 1,	Glad you finally reposted the prologue. I do have one point of criticism, though. At some point, you're going to have to explain how the Empress came to be the Empress. I mean, she's rather adament about not wanting the job here, and with a person as stubborn as Avella, readers should have some trouble accepting that she just suddenly folded and accepted the crown. You're going to have to explain that at some point... Okay, that's all.
aneman333 2008-09-27 ch 9,	Good for you, Sol. I'm glad this chapter is finally up. Now we can move on to the next one! Yay!
aneman333 2008-07-10 ch 8,	I really liked this chapter- I think you did very well with it. I especially liked the different legends surrounding the different characters. The story seems to be developing nicely to- good plot developement in this chapter. I can't believe you picked that surname for Avella though; I was only kidding about that one. Then again, I should have known the irony would have been too much for you to resist. Anyway, keep it up and update as soon as you can!
aneman333 2008-06-17 ch 7,	Very nice. (It had better be with how many times we went over it. :D Jk.) I really like how the ending turned out- you did very good with that. And you achieved your goal; you created a very realistic blend of anger/sorrow/hopefulness. I know Avella's changing moods can be a bit complicated and difficult to write, but you did very good with that. I'm proud of you, minion. Keep writing. :D
aneman333 2008-06-09 ch 6,	As I already said, I like it. I think its funny, and I'm glad you finally indicated exactly how long its been. Its very important to indicate the passage of time, otherwise it confuses the readers. And, my student, I must tell you my number one rule in writing: DO NOT CONFUSE THE READERS. Everything you write, everything that happens should be clearly explained and easily understood. Reading confusing material is not pleasant, and you do not want to ** off your readers. (I know you think its fun, but don't do it. Just...don't.) And remember that your readers are not always privy to whatever extra information is going on in your head. Good job, I really liked this chapter and I can't wait for the next one- so write, my puppet, write! Sorry, you're not a puppet, you're a minion...puppets are far more cooperative... :D
aneman333 2008-05-28 ch 5,	Good job, minion. Though, you still haven't addressed why Elvira and Allan are here. I look forward to your next chapter. (And I can't believe you left the 'sex-starved' phrase in there! I was only kidding!)
aneman333 2008-05-15 ch 4,	Nice, minion. I like the bit that you added at the end. It's a good addition.
aneman333 2008-04-21 ch 3,	LOL! Great job minion! Fantastic! I especially loved the "livlier than a box full of kittens" comment. It really made me laugh out loud, which is actually pretty hard to do when I'm reading. Great job! (The corrections you made really improve things and make it easier to understand.)
aneman333 2008-04-21 ch 3,	Eric. I think you uploaded the wrong one.
aneman333 2008-04-06 ch 2,	Good, minion. I approve this story. I can't wait to meet Gregori, though, so hurry up and write the next chapter!!
Anelle 2008-02-07 ch 1,	Hey Panda this is good but I liked the old version to. This seems to be more thought out so good job. ~*~
aneman333 2008-01-13 ch 1,	It's pretty good. (Better than your last one. I hope you get the next chapter up soon than this one though.

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