aw, i really like this. it's really well written yet at the same time, so simple. lovely. = )

you made me hungry.. lol... great descriptions of the food and I love the ending... people watching and then that last line is awesome

I really like this. It's simple but detailed and well written overall. I do have some nitpicks and grammatical issues.

1. The line break between L1/L2 feels awkward because you're splitting the description up. Since you don't do it again, it's not a stylistic thing and it detracts from the initial reading.
2. The first "--" should be a colon and the next two sets should only have one "-". On L7/L8, they should be on the same line.
3. On L14 "dawdle" should be "dawdling".
4. L6 doesn't quite make sense as there should be a noun after "my" and that carries over to L9 as it doesn't quite specify what eases your mind.
5. More periods. I'm thinking one after L2, L4 (instead of the comma), L8, L10 and L12.

Good luck with an edit :)

Midnight