Reviews for Yadayas in the brain

Reviews For: Yadayas in the brain

FellowMan 2008-03-16 ch 1,	abuseI just noticed this--at the end of this poem where it says "enduring" that's a typo it should be "endearing" sorry ! fellowman
The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon 2008-03-16 ch 1,	abuseThis is cool. I liked it, it was REALLY deep and I never would have thought of it that way. Write on! Pen.Dragon
KaiBee 2008-02-20 ch 1,	abusePersonally, I love the rambling style of it. It seems true to the format. Beautifully rugged. Captures great thought.
CaveDwellers 2008-02-11 ch 1,	abuseHello. An interesting title for such a short little drabble. Rather funny, actually. Compelled me to make a new tab, it did. And I must say, that third paragraph contains a mighty long sentence. Perhaps it's only because it's ramblings, but it just went on and on. Trying to figure out which hyphen--dash? Hyphen? Eh, whatever--went where with the lack of commas, semi-colons and periods was frustrating. They can be such powerful tools, but I feel as though their use is a tad demeaned by the lack of other punctuation marks. However, an interesting concept to Ramble about. It's a good point. The heart doesn't really have much character. Every now and again it might contract or skip a beat, but it is true that the belly is much more expressive. A bit of a scatterbrained piece, actually. From the not wanting to chatter and smile to polyps of music and touch to stomach expressions and then drawing perspective back again with an opinion of the whole thing, all in a few paragraphs. But as the title forewarns, it's the Ramblings of the Brain. When has the inner ramblings of one's own mind ever made sense when put into such a raw form? It makes me feel more than a little ridiculous for picking it apart like this, but somehow, the impulse to review remains. Strange, how it's turned into its own little rambling segment. 'Til next, CD 1.0

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