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| simpleplan13 2008-02-18 ch 1, | I like the repetition of words within the lines... its nicely done... I also like the random rhyming a lot... it's a great piece and I love the question it asks at the end |
| black*tears*of*innocence 2008-01-22 ch 1, | I can really relate. I know how it is to just want to be numb to everything and not feel. But, I don't think it's a good thing all the time (just as you mentioned) I really like this poem. I liked the flow and the rhyming. Even though the last few lines didn't quite match with the flow of the rest of the poem, it's not like they detracted from the rest of it, either. What I got out of this is basically the well-known saying "what doesn't kill us makes us stronger". Hope I'm not too far off from what you were trying to portray. Anyways, please keep up the good work! (oh, and by the way, thank you so much for all your wonderful reviews on my poems. they are much appreciated!) ;P |
| piuk 2008-01-14 ch 1, | Great!! |