thats probably the most powerful ending of a poem i've read in years. absolutly beautiful if i do say so. the italics give it such a resounding BANG at the end... i see so much of myself in your writing, but this isnt a place to get into that haha this is very song like. did you have a tune or something in mind when you wrote it? cause i almost heard one while i read. anyways, fantastic as always!

I love this. Its a well written, beautiful piece!

wow that was amazing. good work. keep it up!

i like this a lot. it's dirty, but not necessarily in a negative way. it's very intersting. i like how the angle flips from being happy and warm & then pessimistic. it's great :)

You know, it was good on paper, but I wasn't a huge fan of it then. I think part of the reason why might have been that your word layout didn't let the words flow as they should have. But, it reads much better this way. Well done.

L. Kantenseter

I like it.

Sorry for the short review, I don't have much critisism to offer. It's already awesome.