The format you chose is terrible for this poem (which isn't much better). Actually, if you look at it the right way, it's in the shape of a giraffe. But there's no spots. There's nothing I can point to and say "that's my favorite..!" Add more detail next time. What is the self-desctutive mode? How are you failing at it? It would be an improvement. A reader needs to FEEL what you're thinking and sometimes simple isn't going to cut it. Keep practicing, OK?