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| molotovcocktailontherocks 2008-06-11 ch 1,  | abuseVery sad and a little heart wrenching, though I have to agree there's a couple parts where the flow is off a bit but it doesn't really take away from the poem too much, overall pretty awesome. |
| dragonqueenc 2008-06-06 ch 1, | abuseT_T! Wow, is this real? It so sad and yet so amazingly right. This is how our trust is crushed and is hard to rebuild. |
| AK the Twilight 2008-06-05 ch 1, | abuseI personally couldn't really pinpoint where this poem was going until the end. At first it felt rather angry, angry at this other person for causing the pain. But at the end, it developed a sense of comfort; the person who seemed to cause the pain is the one who would take it away, which is an odd idea to say the least. Aside from some minor meter problems (some lines didn't have a consistent rhythm), this really felt original and to a degree "heartfelt." Keep up the great work. |
| Starfire17 2008-05-28 ch 1, | abuseThis is very sad. Its a very good poem as its so emotive and still tells its story. Very good work |
| kloun doll 2008-05-25 ch 1, | abuseit's as if there's a story in this, it's kinda interesting, my favorite part is: You used to tell me things That I’ll never forget |
| MacNWoody 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abusehey, its Morgan, ^_^...been awhile since I've reviewed your work, haha I liked this poem...its really sad. but you are able to paint some really powerful images through simple words...good work! |
| CandanyBaby 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abuseI LOVE YOUR POEMS! AND STORIES TOO!! |
| purple x pen 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abusethis is really sad, i cant personally relate, but its good all the same =) |
| simpleplan13 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abusevery sad piece... the reader definitely feels your emotion... I love the chorusy part... beautiful piece |
| smile for the sunshine 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abusei semi-know the feeling. well conveyed. the rhyming was nice. hope life starts to blow you more kisses. keep writing. |
| Johnathen Braun 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseNice work. Well formed quatrains. I enjoyed this poem. Keep writing. :) |