At first glance, I feel your rhyming is sporatic. Maybe there is a pattern I am simply too dense to comprehend?
'Left to cool into crystals
-fabric for her gown'-- Beautiful lines.
-J.A.
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This is really beautiful, and sad at the same time. It has a touch of mystery, and reminds me of Romantic ballads, especially of the "Lady of Shalott". Your choice of words and the rhyme do a lot to create this mysterious atmosphere. I agree with the previous reviewer about the rhyme scheme. Truly an intriguing poem.

Hey, it's been a long time (perhaps years?) since I've gotten to read or review anything on here, I've only posted here and there. But then I remembered the small network of people who seemed to always kindly read and review, and you were one of those people. So I thought I'd pay you a visit, and was pleasantly surprised to see you had very recent writings. But enough ramblings.

The poem itself is sad and cries a quiet pain. Apparently the woman portrayed here lives in the facade of false beauty and empty pleasures, all the while avoiding that "horrid shade of grey" that lies just below the surface. Beautiful imagery, thorough points, and unique stanzas come to my mind.

The stanzas are, indeed, unique. I was trying to pick up on the rhyming scheme, and found it difficult to track...here's an analysis of what I mean:

(same letters suggest the rhyme scheme, for example, line "a" and another line "a" would rhyme)

Stanza 1:
a
a
b

#2:
c
a
d

3:
e
e (possibly)
d

4: (which comes up with 4 lines)
d
d
f
g

5:
h
b
b

6:
b
b
i

7: (also with 4 lines)
j
a
a
f

etc.

With a more free-style poetry form, you are awarded much leniency with your rhyme pattern, which makes it perhaps more artistic than sticking to a system anyhow. I personally don't feel it conflicts much with your overall purpose for this piece. It is well crafted, well written, and well put.

The 3rd and 4th stanza's were great. The flow in this poem was well kept and I like the imagery. Keep it Up!