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| Written 2008-01-30 ch 1,  | abusewhoa! creepy. there's not much else I can say. you did a great job creating atmosphere at the beginning in the bus as well, and it somehow seems like patty IS a ragdoll, getting her neck snapped like that. I keep thinking he murdered her even though there's nothing in the story about that really, but I love how he lied to the cops and he has her name and number but doesn't give it. nicely done. |