Kill the period at the end and separate this out in stanzas. Otherwise, fully punctuate this piece. I like the content but any discernible rhythm and emphasis is missing because you've just placed the words on a page. Give it structure and it will read more beautifully than it does now.

Otherwise, kudos on the content,
Midnight

''With sparkling eyes of everlasting promise'' was a good line. Great poem. Keep it Up!