He could've gave some back but that was very interesting

I really like this concept! Finally, a story about a man who's not too thrilled about his first time.. Usually guys are real macho and would fake it. But, this guy is genuine. Great work.

I like the fact that this has more dialogue and description of things like their emotion in between. For a lot of the other ones I've read, it's more just like a big slab of description that gets a bit meaningless. Like, you tried to develop a bit of character and what not into it, which was better.

Yes, they do seem naive, and it makes it a little more humorous in their interactions and all. It's better described too and not rushed. Perhaps my only opinion is that there could be more a back story on the characters and something besides just this scene as a scene itself.

What the hell was that? I mean, that girl! shut up already! And, that ending..just, wow! poor guy!
I'm not sure who these characters are, I've never heard of them are they made up for this or have I heard of them and just forgot?
But seriously, I liked this! I thought it was neat and different from your other writings. I think I say that cause of the girl talking on and on..
Awesome descriptions!