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| painted eyes 2008-07-06 ch 1,  | abuseI really like this, I like the imagery of the 'flame'. Though I think there should be a break between the first and the second line, maybe a full-stop will work, but possibly a comma. But, this is only one opinion. Keep up the good work! ~painted |
| Shadowe Goddess 2008-04-11 ch 1, | abusevery nice i've felt like this... you're awesome, i can't do haiku i havent done it since elementary class |
| hallow heart 2008-04-10 ch 1, | abuseZOMG. i don't know why but this hit home. i was curious because of the the title and then disappoint at the shortness & then i read it. and it's like you can take three sentences - be all bam in joor face. simply love. |
| kloun doll 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abusethere must be a lot of passion in your emotions and they rise like a flame. it's a good haiku. |
| 123454321 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abuse'Through the fires flames'-- 'fires' should have an apostrophe. Critiquing haikus is absurdly hard for me, but I feel this one is bogged with overrated cliches. If an emotion fades, can it change? Or just cease? And doesn't a flame increase an emotion? Rile something inside us as humans? -J.A. |
| Moondog Dozier 2008-01-18 ch 1, | abuseVery representative, and visual. Excellent haiku. |