I like this. Usually I'm more a fan of freelance poetry, and this is the first consecutively rhyming poem I've read on FictionPress that I honestly appreciate (not that there isn't other good rhyming poetry, I just haven't found it yet).

Great work!

Good work here. While the rhyming feels a bit unnatural in parts, on the whole you use it well and it supports the overall voice and tone of your poem. Characterizing the speaker's eyes as having a wasteland inside them was a powerful image and lent the piece strength and solid imagery which you built off of nicely.

I'd say keep on writing and refining your ability to use rhyme scheme, which is very difficult, and all the kinks will work themselves out. This was a good, creative piece and a pleasent read, well done. Let me know if this review was unsatisfactory, if you would like more reviews, or if there's anything else I can help you with.