Awe I like this, but there's no more... there should be more! :P

No! Tell me this is a cruel joke! I was looking forward to reading this so much!

But then, I guess I can understand what you mean. I mean, you always want one of your stories to turn out just right, right? So if that's what you feel you need to do, I fully support you!

In the meantime, please at least entertain us with a different story (and maybe some more frequent updates?). ^^

Okay.
Laters.

Loves - Luci.

Now I want to read more.

Thank you for that. :P

eh, things happen...I totally understand. Just make sure that you're doing this because of real constructive critisism and not just someone's mean rant. I thought the chapter was fine, but it's ultimately your choise what you do with your story. I'm just here to support you, so all's forgiven kay?

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Omg.
It has been a long, long time since I've read a story on this site that has gotten me this excited to know what's going to happen next. In fact, I've become so discouraged with FP that I've moved to adultfanfiction for my reading enjoyment. Mhm. Bu I don't post there.

I actually think the last time I truly enjoyed a story of FP was "The Cole Turns To Ash", which I was so incredibly excited to find out that you love. ^^

I also must say that you know how to write one hell of a summary. It sucked me in before I even knew it.

One thing I did notice is that you introduced too many characters at once without actually... introducing them. Like, they're there, but we don't know anything about them, you know? That's a really easy mistake to make because, since YOU know everything about your characters, it's easy to forget that the readers only know as much as you blatantly tell them.

But other than that, this story rocks. I was wondering when you were planning on updating? Cause it would rock so much if you did.

Of course, I can't be like, "hey, you're a bad author if you don't update" because that would make me a HYPOCRITE since I haven't updated in... forever. Lol.

Also, if I asked very sweetly, would you send me the old version? I promise not to be turned off by it! I've just fallen in love with the idea of this story and I NEED MORE! Lol.

♥Please?♥
♥Please?♥
♥Please?♥
♥Please?♥
♥Please?♥
♥PLEASE??♥

That's me asking sweetly. ^^

Lol. Okay, I'm out. I think I'll go read more of your stuff, now.

♥ - Luci.

Hi! I just read the chapter again, and wanted to remind you you are a genious! The original story was good, but this one looks very promising. More relatable I think. Well, I do hope you continue with this story (and it's sequel...?) but take your time! I am curently enjoying A Fugative and Me (which, ps, is amazaing!) and i really enjoy your frequent updates. Well, i'm rambleing now and am finally inspired to continue my own story (Freedom's Price) I wanted to thank you for your entertainment and insporation. Keep up the incredible work!

Very interesting. Shane and Jazon are lovely characters. Looking forward to a new chapter.

I think Jason is a closet case lol! Shane sounds ubber sexy! update soo plz!

Very interesting. I never read the original so I am definitely looking forward to the re-write. This is really good! Please update soon! :D

Cool story so far. Shane is hilarious.

oh interesting...I like it. I like how the plot is starting to shape up. I like how oblivious Jason seems to be...

Nice! I didn't read the original version, but this is a great beginning. I'm still trying to figure out of Shane actually likes Clark, or if he really is just trying to get to Jason. We shall see!

aww! I cant wait for the next chapter!