I love this.

And have you noticed that on the top of all these stories, it says "fanfic" even though these aren't fan fics?

That. Was amazingly emotional.
I read through it and actually felt what she felt.
You have a very strong writing style. It makes the reader want to cry or laugh along with the character. Not many people can do that.
:)
Fadedhightops

Wow, I think that was the best one shot I have ever read. It was truly an original piece and kudos to you. It was amazingly written and with a powerful voice. A very interesting concept and I LOVED it! Keep writing! This is going straight into my faves.