Reviews for The Mark of Thorn: Book of Scars

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StrugglingAngel 2008-05-27 ch 29,	abuseWell! Another job well done! I will admit that I passed this story over when you first started writing it in favor of another one, but then I found myself backtracking to it, and I am very glad I did. The story fits together well, each character holding on to their...character throughout the story. The conflicts, both internally and externally, keep things interesting and the plot, with all it's intricacies, is interesting in itself and addictive, pulling the reader back for more (at two in the morning). So. All in all, a well done story and I am on my way to book two!
cookymonster 2008-03-15 ch 29,	abusei read the news on your profile page, and here's my thought: pleasepleaseplease post the book of beauty. i started book of scars and stayed up until four finishing it. it was just so good, i couldn't stop. i also noticed that you put up a picture of diego, and i love how you drew the eyes. do you think that you can put up the picture of gabriel again? i didn't get a chance to look at it before.
H.A. Blair 2008-03-11 ch 29,	abuseAmazing, as usual. As for the material as a whole... I would say it is very well-planned and written. You've answered necessary questions within the story itself. (I have yet to find myself going "WTF is going on?!" or "When did that happen?!") Also, you've left just enough questions to make the readers want more. My biggest questions are definitely "Did Narestra kill Rapunzel or really just send her away?" and "Who are the newest victims?" But, as I've rambled quite enough here, I will say that I am greatly anticipating Book 2 and I'll be reading The Captor's Redemption in the time between!
Christine 2008-03-11 ch 29, anon.	abuseThis is great! I love your incorporation of the different fairy tales into your story: Rapunzel, Beauty and the Beast, Puss in Boots. I love the way you put a dark twist on all your stories. This story line is pretty cool. I feel like it's like a video game where the characters have to go on a quest and battle monsters and eventually beat the Boss (the sorceress). I'm looking forward to them beating the sorceress but I am curious about WHY the sorceress is cursing and killing people. There has to be a deeper reason than 'she likes to kill for fun'. I'm sad you took down "The Art of Silence". I thought it was getting good at the chapter you ended with.
juni 2008-03-10 ch 29, anon.	abuseLani, Splendid, splendid, absolutely SPLENDID! I very much look forward to the second book, I do hope it will come quick enough for me to indulge over Spring Break. Marvelous job on the Book of Scars. Keep up the great work!
nefarious nature 2008-03-09 ch 29,	abuseWhoa...that was totally awesome! I say, a great ending to the first book. I can't wait till you post the next one! I assume that is Narestra at the end, right? Is she not as completely evil as I first thought? Instead, she just enacts her own brand of vigilante justice? Hm...will the third Marked be a result of her next attack? Oh, and I always wondered how Cornelia manages to kick bad-guy butt in a corset? Just a thought.
Pen'NInk 2008-03-09 ch 29,	abuseI'm fascinated. The story line, characters, rhythm, everything--I'm just enthralled with 'Book of Scars.' It was such a lovely work, dear. And great closure! Your extra effort on this chapter really paid off. Far too many writers fall prey to shoddy endings and loose ends. Fortunately, your stylistic precision and wonderful storyteller's instincts prevented this. The biblical quote was also a nice touch. Truly a fitting close to such an enjoyable piece. Now, to address the questions you had for me in your last response (since I cannot, for the life of me, figure out how to directly reply to your replies). Most of the issues I found were primarily within Hendrik’s and Diego's fight. It seemed that you set the entire situation up very well and we have a good grasp of what's going on, where they are physically... and then the story just becomes muddled and we really doesn't know what's happening or where they are and so forth. That, for me, was the really huge issue, the fact that I hadn't a clue where they were or what they were even doing. I noticed that you tended to do that on varying levels in chapters 23 through 25. Watch out for that when you're rereading your chapters; often when writers write fight scenes, their minds perceive the images faster than the writers can type and you wind up with that foggy, messy narrative. One other thing that tended to bother me about the cited fight scenes was that your wording felt weak. Your adjective choices aren't what I come to expect from you (unique, colorful, fresh) and your verbs and adverbs lacked the pizzazz that would've made the scenes really pop. Hope this helps and looking forward to the next book. Take your time posting it though--I haven't had the time to look over 'Captor' at all with all these new chapters for 'Scars'! -Ink
Satar 2008-03-09 ch 29, anon.	abuseas a whole, I found the story to be very engaging and interesting, the plot moved at a steady pace, scenes were decribed beautifully, the slow and intricate unravelling of the characters pasts and secrets was very well done, each chapter left me wanting more and i hope book 2 begins soon! this last chapter i feel was an intro into the 3rd marked person? i so wanted to kick that servants **, being mean to old people is no-no, its like the oldest fairy tale rule ever.what an Idiot...he just screwed over everyone in the area.
Juni 2008-03-09 ch 28, anon.	abuse=D Dahling Im frankly madly in love with you right now! 6 chapters in barely a week! Oh do keep them coming :)
Pen'NInk 2008-03-09 ch 28,	abuseI was delighted by chapter 27 and 28--they pleasantly contrast the hasty pace of the previous chapters. You’re using a lot of unique phrasing in these two chapters, building emotive tension, and hunkering down for the long haul in this novel (novella?). Despite my bias for Hendrik, I really do enjoy reading about the relationship that Cornelia (who, I believe, quite possibly might be the beauty from ‘Beauty and the Beast’) and Gabriel have. You’re taking your time with it, letting it develop slowly and naturally, gently. It feels… very beautiful, and I’m keen on seeing you expand its plot. In contrast (fabulous contrast!), Hendrik and Cornelia are everything that she and Gabriel are not: rushed, hot, violent, and wondrously dark. Quite honestly, they remind me of the true Grimm’s fairy tales before they were unfortunately censored. However, I digress. My point was that you’re using the technique parallelism exquisitely! A few much loved lines were: "'Two guns,' the demi-human confirmed finally, looking back to his toys. 'They are a fine pair. Truly, just as fine as the pair Cornelia has.'" (28) "'I liked the other way better,' he said." (28) "...he was not a lapdog." (28) Now, in a completely unrelated thread, I've been working a manuscript about a writer, a Fablist, who writes modern-day fairy tales. The chapters alternate from focusing on him in the present tense, to his writings. I've recently been writing a fairy tale for this project involving the 12 months as characters, six men, six women. With you being a solid writer with a good mind for characterization and stylistics, I feel compelled to as your personal opinion: Would February be a man or a woman? Affectionately, -Ink
Pen'NInk 2008-03-09 ch 24,	abuseAhh, lovely!! I'm pleased with the changes in chapter 15--it really does make the world of difference, just a few tweaks here and there. My complaints with the most recent chapters, unfortunately, aren’t quite as specific as I'd like to give you. The issue that I had with a few sections, usually the fight sections, were that they moved too fast--and not in a good way. Usually high-tension fights scenes do move quickly, but there were times that it felt like you were rushing, that you should've lingered a little more here and there. These sections didn’t have the meticulous, precise air that your work normally has and, to be frank, I merely skimmed them for information instead of lingering to enjoy your use of language as I normally do. Also, while I adored your descriptions of Hendrik and Cornelia within the last three chapters, the paragraphs concerning Diego left me a little wanting... It seemed forced, somehow. I understand that our beloved cat is a comical creature and while I appreciated a few of the humorous jabs, it felt overdone as a whole. (In your more recently posted chapters--which I have yet to review--you remedied the situation by allowing Diego to be charming, catty, humorous, ect., just through dialogue and character interaction. That seems to work better for you than using tiny bits of information that are out of context with the surrounding paragraphs.) On a brighter note, I was rather fond of the end fight scene and the way chapter 25 closed. Hope this helps and, as always, I apologize for any offense in this critique.
nefarious nature 2008-03-08 ch 28,	abuseGreat chapter! I loved the scene where Cornelia teased Hendrik with a flash of skin. Very funny! It even tricked me. I just love the interactions between those two. Now what does Cornelia need to inform Hendrik about? A repayment? I wonder... Oh and thanks for the e-mail. I sent you one too!
Satar 2008-03-08 ch 28, anon.	abuseim still unsure about diego's character, its obvious hes not completely honest about his reasons to help out cornelia. he has certianly manipulated cornelia to his benefit to get hendrik off his back for now anyway, if he didnt join them hendrik was sure to kill him off,i think a rather smart move on his part.i find it pretty amusing that cornelia seems to find so many attractive, theres so much sexual tension..poor diego must feel left out.
cookymonster 2008-03-08 ch 27,	abusei love how fast you keep uploading.
nefarious nature 2008-03-07 ch 26,	abuseHey, can I be the VP of the Hendrik fan club? I promise that I will fulfill all of my VP duties! Scout's honor!...Anyway, thanks for the super duper quick and awesome update. I was wondering if there are any books that you could recommend that are similar to your stories (dark fantacies) besides the Grimm stories? Thanks, you're an awesome possum!

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