I really suck for not reviewing until now but this chapter really touched me. :)

this is really wierd coz it just started to rain where i live... cept rain in florida tends to be a normal occurence...

HOLYCRAPILOVETHISSTORY!
THANKS so much for taking time to write and post this beautiful story, I enjoyed it so much. YOU ROCK GIRL!
:)

im not going to finish reading this coz it is suspiciously similar to twilight. PLAGARISM

Yay! I finally finished it! During the last chapters my head was spinning trying to figure out what was going to happen. I'm like she should cause them as much pain as possible.
I love the title, I actually went and looked up Omnipotence before i read the story to find out what it means & as a result it's now one of my new favorite words. XD I want to find a way to use it in one of my stories now.
This is a really good piece of work, I'm sure your proud of it. I would be. My goal right now is to actually complete a story, that's the only reason I've posted any, people support you know.
I want to read Debilitated too, I just have no clue when I will get the chance to do so. I promise you I will at some point in before I die. lol
Okay I'm off to face the real world now. Good luck.
~Crimson Ara

Really good story so far, I'm about to finish reading the rest of it. Elizabeth never gave Jesse directions to her house, I noticed that while they were arguing. That would freak me out just a tiny bit, lol. Well I'm about to go continue reading.

loved it!!

I think this story is amazingly well-written. I love your writing style.

I have one point of criticism, though, and it stems from your character development. I don't like Jesse. He's bland/personality-less and he doesn't kill Liz because he loves her, but WHY does he love her? He doesn't know her at all, and it doesn't really make any sense. More importantly, I think Elizabeth is kind of annoying. She doesn't know Jesse AT ALL, but she's completely obsessed with him from the beginning of the story. And I get that you were trying to make that a reason for them to fall in love, that she's just naturally drawn to him, but frankly, it's a little unrealistic (even for a supernatural story). Her logic throughout the first 10 or so chapters is flawed on just about everything. I also don't like that she's best friends with Jenna, but only because there's no one else around. Several times she even questioned her own motives for their friendship, which makes me think she's a fake person. The sad thing is, I agree with Liz that Jenna is selfish and vain, which means that I don't particularly like any of the main characters. I didn't finish reading this, so I don't really know if anything changes and they all get less annoying, but they shouldn't all bother me from the beginning; that won't keep any reader reading your story.

I'm not trying to nitpick, I swear. I've never written a review this long for a story on FP, which means that I care enough to tell you what I like/don't like. It's just that when the narrator's point of view is annoying and not endearing or identifiable, it's hard to really get into the plot. That's the biggest pitfall in this story, I think.

Anyway, I like that you didn't make Jesse a vampire or anything cliched like that. It was such a mystery for awhile and I was afraid you were just going to say "so, he's a vampire," and that's it (which would've been such a cop-out with all the mysterious build-up from the beginning). Anyway, don't take my criticism to heart. I think you're an amazing writer with an incredibly unique style. I just think you should spend more time making your characters more likable by exploring their motivations for their actions and feelings. Good luck with your writing in the future!

Wow... that was intense, i really thought that she was going to die at some point. This was a really interesting story, i love the fantasy, magical, and supernatural genre and ive never come across anything quite like this before, so it was great to read because recently ive come across a lot of stories that are quite similar.

So i loved it but there were a few things i noticed:
At the begginning, it seemed that she became consumed with him way to quickly, like he hadnt even done anything and she was disliking him.
Also, mabye i missed it but i dont understand what their purpose was, why they killed humans, i mean there might not be one, but it confused me, because it wasnt explained.
And sometimes, throughout the story things jumped quite quickly from one thing to another and i was a bit confused about what was going on, like at the end there, when she was being held captive, and different people kept on coming in and her thoughts and mindset kept changing drastically. I think mabye it might just be because there wasnt any marks on the page to break parts up like the night and then the next morning (ive forgotten what theyre called, when you have a little line of stars or something to break up a chapter)

Kudos for the mystery aspect though, i really didnt know if there was anything wrong with him and it was infuriating (in a good way! :D) And Elizabeth is actually one of the most original protagonists ive read about in a while, her personaltity was completely her own and im not going to lie, i didnt actually like her that much, especially at the beginning, because she was so mean to jenna and she didnt seem to like anyone, but i loved that because its real, she didnt do what i expected.

Wow this story is good. There are a few things that are hard to understand but that's just the magic of a story. I think it is really romantic and I like how you have a character, Jesse, that isn't like any character I've seen beofre. You added your own breed of human, well, technically, he's not human, but you know what I mean. Though I don't really like violent storeis that have alot of detail, so if there's gory stuff ahead, it might lower my rating...or it might not. But you story is really good and I seriously haven't read a book that has a clan of Omnipotents, heck, I haven't heard of omnipotent beings before now. Wow! I really enjoy your individuality and an original story line. It still kind of reinds me of Twilight, but not everything in a story has to be unique. But it has its own special qualities that make it as good, or better, than Twilight. If you think of something else to write about I would enjoy reading it. Just don't make it frothy and fun. I like stories with a deeper plot or meaning like this one. It's not just.. oh their in love and get married after college after Johnny saves Susan from a sycotic boyfriend and they realize they're soulmates. K, this story is not like that. I really like how it has a sinster force at work and a little bit of fighting. (Heck, action ALWAYS makes the story better in my book) but seriously this book is like MAGNIFIQUE! YOu should publish it or write another story and have it published. More of the public needs to know about this book. It is very mature, but has a source of innocence that teens would enjoy. It has romance.. and who doesn't like a good romance story? Plus it has humor and jealousy and lots of other mini-plots and factors that include everything awesome. I really love you book and heed good advice. PUBLISH! No you don't have to if you want but this is an awesome story. Hey, just thought I'd throw this out there, but there are some grammatical errors and I think maybe part of a sentence is missing here somewhere, not in this part, but you know, near the beginning. Yeah, well,k love your book, thanx for reading this.

This story reminds me alot of Twilight. It's just as good though, but in different ways. Some things are boscure though but that could just be that I haven't read the entire story yet. I like it though... and no, I'm not paranoid

I absolutly loved this story. I was amazing! I love the way it ended. I'm fixing to check out your page to see if there is a sequl. You are an amazing writer! I truly mean that. :)

I really like how Jessie's protrayed-he sounds HOT! ^^ I really like the title too, it fits the story perfectly to me.

hm...ya know, this chapter REALLY reminds me of Twilight...

This story is real bad. Why? Because you basically took the plot of Twilight and switched the character's names. The only original thing in this story is...nothing. That's my opinion.
- A Honest Girl