I throughly enjoyed this story! The narrative flow was smooth and compelling, while the dialogue was insightful, thought-provoking, and incredibly funny. Hope to see more original fiction from you in the future.

I'm going to preface this a bit by saying I am a big fan of your K.P. stories. So I went browsing through your profile to see if you had any more stories that I might not have read and I came across a link for this one. I have to say I was a bit disapointed. I didn't care about any of the characters. I felt nothing for them, love , hate , sorry, nothing. Your original characters in fan fiction almost always evoked some kind of feeling from me. None of these did. I'm no expert, so I can't say what you should do to make me feel something for them. I just know that you are more than capable of doing it, because you have done it for probably a dozen bit characters in your other stories.