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Yuniko 2008-07-10 ch 5,	abusethe japanese names make me wish it was a manga. just i just love reading stuff that got pics too. :) but good job on the chapter.
Number One Dancing Queen 2008-07-10 ch 5,	abuseThis is really interesting keep up the good work. Update soon. ^_^
Cinnamon-sama 2008-07-09 ch 5,	abuseAnother excellent chapter and a new addition to the cast. This Suzu seems to as intriguing as Izumi and just as mysterious. He's one I'll be watching and I can't wait for the moment when you bring these characters together. Til next chapter...
Cinnamon-sama 2008-07-02 ch 4,	abuseIzumi's introduction was excellently written. I find myself craving more of he story now than I do Shiori's. These two are a contrast of each other, I can't wait to see where you're going with this. Til next chapter...
Crazy In 88 2008-06-04 ch 2,	abuseThis story is getting better each time! I know, I should've already read this, right? Been away a long time... but still love your stuff! Well, if you get a chance I could really use your input on my new story "Tensho". I only have two chapters up, but I want to make sure you like it, since that's kinda your forte. I'm off to read more now! :)
Crazy In 88 2008-05-20 ch 1,	abuseI'm back! It's been a while and I'm really liking this story. Who but a true writer looks up proto-yakuza? I have to check out more- l8er!
Eternal Crusher 2008-03-03 ch 4,	abuseHey, good chapter. Too bad for Izumi loses her family, gets another family and then loses a part of that one. Anyways looking forward to the next chapter. Eternal Crusher
Lady MeiLin 2008-03-01 ch 4,	abuseI feel unbelievably guilty for putting off this review for so long. x.x Anyway - I'm trying to put pieces together here. But I think, like usual, it'll end up being a surprise. Which is always great because you're surprises are always pleasant. Waiting for the next chapter. Meilin
Arcane D. 2008-02-28 ch 2,	abuseApologies, for the much duely late review. First and foremost, I really enjoy where the plot is heading. I'm going to take my time and indulge myself chapter by chapter, so I think I'll stop after chapter two for the day. Imagery, diction, and the dialogue are all well-coordinated and smooth. I can't possibly think of a critique with the exception that this chapter was TOO long. haha, I kid. Omura's pretty badass, but we all know what's coming to him within the next few chapters. Until our next review then. arcane
Denzel'sCRIMSON 2008-02-23 ch 4,	abuseYeah... That's what I'm talking about. She pwns!! I'm glad that to find out about her past a little after the incident. This was a really well written chapter and I like how you used 'Pause.' and 'Fast Forward' to add more drama to the story. I like your style of writing. It's very unique and I think you should keep it. Very good work again. I'm rooting for Izumi to find happiness.
Shining Silver Phoenix 2008-02-18 ch 1,	abuseHello! Long time no see! Nice story here! Full of murder and mystery. Reminds me of an anime I'm getting into. Um...if you don't mind, would you like to see/review my story? I'm working on chapter 24 but I have BAD writer's block. Sorry to ask in case you're busy and stuff. This is a good story.
Denzel'sCRIMSON 2008-02-16 ch 3,	abuseGod!! Why couldn't she just except the hug and embrace the happy feeling!!? Meh, oh well, it's just the way life goes, right? Another great job. You really conveyed Shiori's emotions well by showing how sad she is and how she is hurting and suffering. You can't help but feel sorry for her. Again, a very, very good job. This story is one of my favorites.
Denzel'sCRIMSON 2008-02-16 ch 2,	abuseAnother great chapter. Only a few punctuation errors. A lot of times where you put "..." in your sentences you could have just put a comma. But its not that big of a deal, just something I noticed. Anyway, I really enjoyed this, but what's up with Shiori not fighting back? And that Omura guy, what does he have to do with anything? Actually, is he one of the detectives' son? Not the Fujisawa one, but the other one, because Tenrou is the Fujisawa detective's son. Sorry, I'm rambling. Good job again.
Denzel'sCRIMSON 2008-02-16 ch 1,	abusePoor Shiori, but I can tell she's going to own whoever killed her parents. Anyway, very good intro. It has me intrigued. Very nice.
Cinnamon-sama 2008-02-15 ch 3,	abuseVery touching chapter!

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