|
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| UtterWeirdo 2008-05-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is a creepy, darkened and macabre masterpiece. |
| Fractured Illusion 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseHeya, I come from the Review Marathon (profile has link) I am not sure if I have missed something, or if you have misunderstood, but I will go out a limb here. Being masochistic means they like to be harmed, as contrary to "sadistic" in which they like to harm. I believe you mean sadistic when you talk about the cruel master, because I see no proof of any masochistic tendencies in him. So yeah. That bugged me a bit. "Her oh-so beloved creator." There would be more impact if you ditched the oh-so, since it sounds mocking, but to the doll, it WAS her beloved creator. So. Yeah... Great start, caught my attention. As far as I interpret from the "story" is that the master violates his puppets with his darkness...or sexually :P For some reason this poem makes me think of an anime that has dolls in it... :P - Frac |
| Angels Broken Shadow 2008-01-20 ch 1, | abuseWow. I loved this. It was amazing. Like...an evil version of Pinocchio!! Lol. Anyway, absolutely fantastic, as usual. |