Powerful.

The sense of potency and immediacy is impressive.

I miss you, sometimes.

I like how it seems to flow out continuously, with no period marks except at the end. Nice.

(Your squinting as you smile" - I think it should be "you're".

I liked this a lot, and thats rally saying something considering I dont really care much for poetry. I think since someone I know and care aboutvwrote the poem, it actually means something. Also, since I have a chance of figuring out what it means, it makes it that much better. Over all I like this piece a lot. I like your other works too, and I hope you'll keep me posted on new works