really good =^-^=

I loved the last few lines of this one!
"Trembling gun.
Clenched fist.
Setting sun.
Salty kiss."
So dramatic and well written ~ loved it! ^^

I'm not usually fond of poems but I like this one. It's dark without being overwhelmingly so (in my opinion, at least). There's just something about it that draws you in.

Nice! Haha, I usually try to give constructive criticism, but I really don't have much that I can add to this. The way it's set up is awesome, and I love the ending. Nice work!