Reviews for leave, stay, wander?

capricioso 2008-03-18 ch 1,	abusei am currently torn between "praising your literary genius-ness" and re-reading it. i love how you wrote the second stanza; it's beautiful. i think this is one of my favourite works so far.
doctor's diagnosis 2008-02-24 ch 1,	abuseReview Game! I really like this, but I think the italic leave/stay/wander doesn't really add to the poem itself. But I LOVE the "please oh god don't jump/I'll miss you" and "I'm not crazy/only in love" and "a dream is a wish your heart makes/have you woken up yet?", though personally I think haven't you woken up yet would be better. I love the lines "they all want to live in a wonderland/but no one knows where the fire escape is". Cheers, Rachel
writingxonxwalls 2008-02-24 ch 1,	abusewritingxonxwalls from the review game hmm it was a very good poem, I thought. It had an interesting topic, and I love the format you put the poem in. I also liked how at the end of each stanza you had two lines somewhat explaining what had just happened. My only problem would be that it didn't seem to flow in some places, while in other places it flowed beauitfully. =) I hope that helped!! --WxOxW