 no.peace.los.angeles 2008-01-20 . chapter 1I like this. I'm not sure exactly what I like about it, but it's fascinating. I like the idea of a closet being angry, the repetitions you used (especially "Skinny mirrors, skinny mirrors."), and this whole thing about having a conversation with the universe. The format is also intriguing, because it's more prose than poem, but it's definitely more of a poem in nature. Good work. Keep writing! :) |