I really, really liked the ending! It was, in some weird way, funny. Well, for me though, I'm not sure if you meant it to be funny. Maybe I'm the weird one there ;-) Don't mind me, then. But, hey, well written! Ben benieuwd wat je hierna gaat schrijven, ik zal je op author alert zetten! Zo, toch nog even wat Nederlands er tussendoor gesneakt ;-)

jojoba-music-girl

Sad, and well put. Good little poem.