Fabulous! Nice work, I hope you update soon!

Keep up the good work!!

~Cookie

hi havent written to you lately. great writing by the way. keep it up!
^_^

this is cool. =D I like how you're describing Shaunas normal day. and also everyone else's veiw of her. you have to do the next chapter soon, I want to find out about Jesse! and the lil ghost girl! =P

there was just one tiny thing, which isn't really that important but I thought I'd let you know -'Shauna and Alice are mirrored opposites' that should be past tense. =P

please update soon!

-by the way does your penname have anything to do with the song?-

this is really good. =D I like the story so far.

2 really little things-

istead of saying 'bending her head downwards' you could say 'looking downwards'. I think it sounds a bit more natural.

and also the very last line 'How could one golden haired girl change everything forever?' (thats a great line. xP) but does Shauna know yet that something is going to change -forever-? maybe you could say 'change everything so suddenly' or something like that.

otherwise this is really great!! I must go read chapter 2! :D