Beautiful! It is suprising how much of the male's character you can put in those few lines. The ending... I can understand Ariadne's dissapointment, but that is why I love it so much: there is a much larger narrative surrounding this one snapshot of a story. Without having to spell it out for us, we can already understand the background story, and we can't help but wondering what happens next. Thank you.

Aww! Thanks for the dedication. It was a sweet poem. I wasn't much for the ending 'cause you know me and endings but great job. I just love writing kiss scenes. I'll add some more for you to read.

Love ya!

Nice work. I have to say I wasn't expecting such a well articulated story from such a short poem. You crafted it with simplicity and drew out the moment and characters well. It's a solid work.

A trivial matter or grammar, but in the second to last line "Praying that she would too felt the passion" that should probably be "feel".

Overall very nice, but I am left wondering something and will have to read a few more of your poems to give you a more comprehensive review.