I list to Fort Minor. Haha. I liked the last line especialy because that's the way I feel and that's why people write. Good job 8D

Owwh! This is really good!

I really like it. Good job. :D

To be honest, the rhyme scheme bugs me and mostly because of your line length particularly in L3&4 because they are so disproportionate that it reads awkwardly. Also, I don't really like your tendency to put a period before an "and". It doesn't really emphasise the next sentence *that* much and for me, just looks clunky.

In terms of content, this is a bit bland, mostly because it's lacking in imagery and you do lean towards the cliched in places ("Cause no one else will remember the pain except me." reeks of self pity). It's not bad but it's not quite there yet. I'd run with some of the images you've got and develop them further ("my brain is on fire with these lyrics, this rhyme" for one).

Otherwise, it's not bad. Just needs a few revisions.

Midnight