1.) "As a boy I might have been intrigued."

Put a comma between 'boy' and 'I.'

2.) "And in the rearview mirror –

My eyelids flutter."

I had a feeling he was going to get into an accident when I read that line. :/ Oh, and it needs to be 'rear-view' instead.

Some great metaphors in this story. Aw...I wanted to know his name. :(

XD But that doesn't matter. It was great anyway. I really enjoyed it. :)

-Ramen

Beautiful. What a great metaphor--the traffic light of life. I completely missed the symbolism at first, but in the end, it made sense. Well done.

" Flesh hangs like wash on a line, weary and loose and boneless"--this was particularly an excellant line.

And I disagree with the reviewer above me. Swear words are a part of life. If you want to write life, you swear. That line would have been ruined without it.

"And why the f**k won’t the light change?" You and I and our ever going argument of language... but really, it interrupts the weariness of his mood. He's tired, forgetful, but all the sudden there's an explosion of vividness to him while the rest of the story has been bland. Aside from my avid dislike of the word, it's distracting. Especially since the next paragraph is talking about his lack of strength.

I like how you tied all the seemingly random memories into why he was thinking all this in the end- because he was in an accident. The story was interesting, but almost pointless until the realization at the end.

I liked it.

~K