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| Limy 2008-09-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseI lovelovelove this. Accurate and perfectly put. |
| Chandra-Moon 2008-05-07 ch 1,  | abuseOoh did someone talk ** on myspace? But a poem is a constructive way to deal with it. You should send her and her filthy mouth this poem. |
| Thoughtful Silence 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseBrutal and true to life, without the sugarcoated-ness (if that was a word) that you see in many many other poems. I especially loved the penultimate stanza- fantastic stuff! -D.S. |
| fatbird33 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseo such hatred. good work i can really feel it |
| Cymphany Jordan 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseInstant satisfaction. |
| Fictoids 2008-02-28 ch 1, anon. | abuse:) El encabalgamiento is what makes this poem powerful. What a punch that last line delivers. |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseWow, brutal. I love the second stanza - it's so ...something. Amazing is not quite right, but it's the closest word I can find to describe it. It was a great read. -stix- |
| Moondog Dozier 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseExcellent write. The tone makes this so relatable. You put the reader in the situation, and say here it is. No flowers, all bee's, but that's what makes it work. The harshness and the human element of it. Great write. MD:77. |
| doctor's diagnosis 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseAnd the title just adds a whole new level to this. I especially love the end. Yes, yes I do. |
| Toothache 2008-02-10 ch 1, | abuse"The words you/ misspell on the page/ form the outline/ of your face." That was my favourite stanza. It hit me the hardest. Very beautiful poetry you have. |
| Lady Fingers 2008-02-03 ch 1, | abusethese are all the words i wish i could say about people obviously this girl is a ** and you depict that well |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-01-25 ch 1, | abuse"Reputations/are for my mothers/braided generation,/and honestly/I don't give a **/what you think about me." SO GOOD. I just love that. And that's the way I've always felt about people who talk trash about other people; obviously they care a whole hell of a lot more than they claim to if they're taking all this time to say bad things about someone. Nice, honest work. Keep writing! :) |
| jjferrit 2008-01-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseyuck, what a disgusting person she must be :( |
| generically beautiful 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseVery powerful piece. I wish a "friend" of mine could read it. -Christine |
| simpleplan13 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseI love the second to last stanza... and the ending... the rest of it is wonderful as well |