Reviews for The Hills of my Cheeks Blush

Reviews For: The Hills of my Cheeks Blush

SickButPretty 2008-03-11 ch 1,	abuseThis is cool. I know how it feels when you imagine/fantasise about talking to someone for so long and what you might say and when you see them you just get mentally knocked on your ** and walk away baffled, wondering what the hell you said (or didn't.)
lomz 2008-02-20 ch 1,	abusei liked this - i like the ongoing food/meal-related motif but i can't help but feel it completely missing in the last lines - i would be amused by an addition perhaps regarding desert or the cherry on top "for long/ stop biting the cherry off of my stem" to kinda bring it back to the real world situation that inspired this - but i still like it nonetheless
seasick 2008-02-12 ch 1,	abuseIt's hard to imagin a good writer being unable to speak intelligently but it happens to everyone and it is the worst feeling in the world. Good luck next time!
paris is burning 2008-02-04 ch 1,	abusei desperately sympathize with you on this matter, having to converse with someone who you`d like to get to know or simply want to talk to is a tedious exercise that usually doesn`t end well. having said that, i applaud you for trying, and if anything this poem is fantastical enough for me to completely shut up about my previous concerns. without trying to sound too cliche, it seems as if ... you`re brought back to that time, to the emotion that you felt, sort of like the exact moment when your internal monologue goes something like, "oh, **." maybe i`m just getting ahead of myself. anyways, i liked it. :}
Enigmatic Paramedic 2008-01-28 ch 1,	abuseI love this. It has a great stream-of-consciousness feeling [the line breaks are fantastic, as is the punctuation, or lack thereof], and the metaphors of the first three lines are brilliant. Well done.
no.peace.los.angeles 2008-01-25 ch 1,	abuseLove the stream-of-consciousness here, first of all. A form of writing I adore & don't see nearly enough. (Or write nearly enough, for that matter.) There is so much imagery in this, I don't even know where to begin. Gah, I love it. "cozy emerald-butter eyes" is such a unique description, and it really works. I'm not sure if I'm a huge fan of "word salad," but I suppose it's more appetizing than "word vomit," yes? Lovely lovely work. Keep writing! :)
Sonora the free 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseWas this for that girl we decided was a bad idea? Anyway, I liked it. It was very relatable.
Kicking Poe 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuse"cozy emerald-butter eyes" is such a wonderful description. I can completely relate to this, and I think you gave new dimension and creativity to a well-known emotion/theme. cheers.
simpleplan13 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseI love the imagery... the first line is great and the description of their eyes is wonderful.. I also love the ending... calling your feelings word salad and how it isnt enough... awesome piece
half-sketched.staccatos 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abusekonnichi wa I like how this poem sounds mixed up, just like her thoughts. "as I stumble down the stairs of my words" was my favorite line. I just love the imagery you presented - so original! :D Zaijen -Shan-
Tytherpol 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseaww. (: it's cool that you gave this enough interesting description to keep it from apprearing too cliche. the third/fourth lines were really very...neat?.. i feel like you can make an entirely different poem with an entirely different meaning using them. i know i want to, but i won't because that would be stealing 0:-) but it will probably be cool if you do.
Michael l'oeil fol 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseinteresting descriptions that fit well with the muddled idea...though i dont think i have ever seen peanut butter eyes...cept maybe on a easter bunny Michael

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