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| EnChAnTeD-KoReAn 2008-06-15 ch 1,  | abusevery cute! i loved it to bits...nice fluff! |
| shy green rock 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abusehaha so cute. I knew he liked her, but it is odd that he just wanted to know how her hugs felt. I guess a hug can tell you a lot about a person and their feelings toward you, right? Tres cute! |
| GrannyP 2008-03-13 ch 1, | abuseThis was a cute story for a young audience. I think that I might be a bit old compared to the audience this was intended for, but it makes me feel younger at heart, so that was nice. I really enjoyed the part where there was a lot of dialogue -- I think good dialogue is a great addition to a story. Keep writing and good luck in the future! |
| beccabrighteyes 2008-01-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is very well done. Wish the guys around here would think of something that romantic. You're lucky if you get a decent note here. |
| SparklingStar25 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abusesweet! |
| Pop the Bubble 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseaw what a cutie pie! now i want a hug :( |
| LiME-GREEN-CAPES 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseadorable :] |
| xxily4everxx 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseAWW!! how sweet! i wish something like dat would happen 2 me 2 ^.^ |
| hypa to hell and back 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abusewow i love it he has a thing for hugs which i think i think is really cute there are a few mistake so i think you might want to read throught i again just to sort it out i cant really remember any of them so im sorry about that but generally love ir soo much |
| Pinkamoo 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseTres cute my little buttercup! lol Heh, good job. Hugs for me? *puppyeyes* |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseYou write very well. I have to admit that I skipped over a lot of the first half of this, but your style grew on my really quickly, it just didn't have the catchy beginning for it. Anyway, yeah, I think this is really good ^^ What you got best was the feeling of reality. Sure, the whole taking-you-to-the-swing-in-flowers thing is pretty much any teenage girl's fantasy, but you made it believable anyway. It's easy to relate to the character and you can just see it all unfold around you. Very nice work! Only stylistic comment I have to make it on the line, "...as I jogged to keep up with him. Ash was taller than me, and therefore he could cover quite a bit of ground in a few strides whereas I couldn’t, and so I had to hurry to keep up with him." - The repeating "keep up with him" breaks the natural flow of it all. Otherwise, awesome! Moon's Poetess P.S. Is this a true story or not, I wonder? =P For most people it's easier to write things based on reality, which then sound a lot more realistic. If it is, then woohoo ^^ |
| daisy dreams. 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abusehehe. i really loved this one. so much fluff! it was so cute, you wrote it very well! definately favoriting this one :) - honey blue |