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| merely.ink 2008-06-23 ch 1,  | abuseI like this piece. Why is it that the only choices are princess or damsel in distress? Why are there no queens? I would much prefer the crown of a queen on her own throne, not necessarily a crown by marriage to a charming, handsome prince. |
| Blind Scribe 2008-06-20 ch 1, | abusevery pretty. write more. |
| Zonne 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseheeheehee I love that line "Princess or damsel in distress" what a great comeback!! I don't like how short it is. Want more. Wonder so much about these little characters, her great icy humor. The review marathon Zonne link in profile |
| squiggle-line 2008-03-10 ch 1, | abuseEvery single word sounds like it's been carefully picked and I like that. The only line I found jarring was "pretty pseudo blue blood." I think you can cut the alliteration and leave it at blue blood/red hot. |
| Professional scatterbrain 2008-01-23 ch 1, | abuseThis was very powerful; it felt like there was something dangerous swimming beneath the surface, just waiting to pounce. Amazing work. |
| Da Vinci at Work 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseShort and powerful. Beautiful writing. |