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| smile for the sunshine 2008-01-31 ch 1,  | abusethis is so sad but yet so beautiful. i think the flirting with catastrophe was so creative. i love that line. although rather depressing it was lovely. |
| Farran 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseThe way this reads is disjointed, It dashes foward before stopind dead to contemplate a line, I love it, it really is how I at leat think. It alows a level of coneection that a carfuly rhymed and structured poem cannot offer. I would say one thing though, Let the words emphasise themselves, you don't need all that formating and caplocks. But thats just my opinion, I'd rather follow the peoms natural flow as I read it than have cirtain words dictated. |
| she smolders 2008-01-26 ch 1, | abuseOh, I loved the almost subtle rhyme and the imagery your words create. I think I've fallen with this phrase now: "flirt with catastrophe". Take care. |
| akaSummer 2008-01-24 ch 1, | abuseI like it! Particularly "just cut out disaster" and "don't carve me out." You used those phrases really efficiently to tie the whole piece together. Very nice job indeed. |