 Farran 2008-01-27 . chapter 1The way this reads is disjointed, It dashes foward before stopind dead to contemplate a line, I love it, it really is how I at leat think. It alows a level of coneection that a carfuly rhymed and structured poem cannot offer. I would say one thing though, Let the words emphasise themselves, you don't need all that formating and caplocks. But thats just my opinion, I'd rather follow the peoms natural flow as I read it than have cirtain words dictated. |